Sonny Advice Letter Comments 

1. Organize your multiple ideas into multiple paragraphs (1 main idea per paragraph).
2. Watch out for run on sentences.
3. How can calculating the percentages spent on each category better convince Sonny to follow your advice?  Implement these calculations when necessary.
4. How does your recommended control system work?  Can you provide a description of what this may look like for Sonny?
5. Check your spelling and grammar (sometimes even spell check misses errors). 
6. You convinced me to review some items in my budget!  
7. You may want to be nicer to Sonny; its only his first time budgeting.
8. Great job!  Sonny is lucky to have you!
9. With some revision, this will be the best letter of advice ever!
10. Feel free to ask for help if you need it.  I will gladly meet with you during a Tribe Time to help you with this composition.